Lilacs

广东 莫 艳

It was a lovely Sunday in May on a small island.However,Grace was feeling a little blue.She had just moved there and it was Mother's Day.Although she missed her mother a lot,she couldn't go back and accompany her at the moment.

She called her mother to wish her a happy Mother's Day,and her mother mentioned how colorful the yard was since spring had arrived.As they talked,the young woman could almost smell the purple lilacs (丁香花) in her mother's yard.How she missed those lilacs! Later,when she hung up the phone,an idea occurred to her.She popped up from her chair,grabbed the car key and rushed out of her house.

Three miles from her house,there lived an old woman,alone.She often sat in her wheelchair on the front porch (门廊),head bowed.When Grace saw her,she waved and greeted the old woman with a polite smile.The old woman slowly lifted her head,smiled back faintly (淡淡地),and then bowed her head again.

So off she went,driving on the country roads and past small villages.It was so pleasant along the way.On both sides of the road,there were all kinds of colorful flowers crowded,giving off fresh and sweet fragrance.However,there wasn't a lilac in sight.The young woman sighed with a bit of disappointment but kept going.

Some time later,she pulled over on the road,looking up to the hill right beside her.She walked a long way up the hill,and sweat began to roll down from her forehead.All of a sudden,a gentle breeze (微风) blew through her hair.Then the fragrance of the lilacs drifted down to her.She felt so excited that she started running until she reached the top.There,on the top of the hill,were the towering lilacs bushes,with huge flowers!A delighted smile appeared on her face and she rushed up to the nearest bush and buried her face in the flowers,breathing in the lovely fragrance.Carefully,she chose a flower here,another one there,and cut them with a sharp knife.Finally,she returned to her car for the trip home.She sat smiling,surrounded by her flowers.

Language Study

Ⅰ.Difficult sentences

1.So off she went,driving on the country roads and past small villages.

译文：随后她就离开了，开车行驶在乡间小路上，并穿过一些小村庄。

分析：本句中off 为副词前置，起强调作用；driving 为现在分词短语作伴随状语。

2.She felt so excited that she started running until she reached the top.

译文：她感到非常兴奋，一路跑到了山顶。

分析：本句使用了两个从句。第一个从句为so...that...引导的结果状语从句；第二个从句为until 引导的时间状语从句。

Ⅱ.Expressions for behaviors

1.Shepopped upfrom her chair,grabbedthe car key andrushed out ofher house.

2.When Grace saw her,shewavedandgreetedthe old womanwith a polite smile.

3.The old womanslowly lifted her head,smiled back faintly,and thenbowed her heada gain.

4.The young womansighed with a bit of disappointmentbut kept going.

5.Sherushed up tothe nearest bush andburied her facein the flowers,breathing inthe lovely fragrance.

Ⅲ.Expressions for environment

1.All of a sudden,a gentle breeze blew through her hair.

2.Then the fragrance of the lilacs drifted down to her.

3.There,on the top of the hill,were the towering lilacs bushes,with huge flowers!

Ⅳ.Pattern to learn

There,on the top of the hill,were the towering lilacs bushes,with huge flowers!

分析：“地点状语+谓语+主语”是一个倒装的表达，强调了地点状语。

仿写：小男孩悄悄地躲在门后，手里捧着花。

Reading Check

阅读上面的短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

注意：

1.所续写短文的词数应为150 左右；

2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

Paragraph 1:

When Grace was passing by the old woman's porch,she suddenly stopped the car.

Paragraph 2:

When Grace got back to the car,she saw the woman in the wheelchair still waving to her,holding the lilacs tightly.

写作导引

一、分析语篇、理清要素

要想续写内容与所给材料内容连贯、衔接紧密，我们必须充分了解所给材料的大意。本文是一篇记叙文，文章分析如下：

二、阅读续写开头语，展开合理想象

我们可以基于标题、原文和续写段落首句提供的信息，构思要续写的故事情节。这一构思分为四步。

第一步，根据已给出的文本判断文章的立意。

根据续写第一段的首句“When Grace was passing by the old woman's porch,she suddenly stopped the car.”可知，格蕾丝停下车去找那个老妇人。那她为何要去找那个老妇人呢？她会做什么呢？她会对老妇人说些什么话？老妇人会如何反应呢？续写第二段的首句“When Grace got back to the car,she saw the woman in the wheelchair still waving to her,holding the lilacs tightly.”中出现了关键词lilacs，所以我们可以推测出续写的第一段中，格蕾丝应该是把她从山上摘的丁香花送给了老妇人。同时，格蕾丝已经进入车里时，这个孤独的老妇人还在向她挥手，手里紧紧地握住那些花，由此也就可以推测出那些花让老妇人很感动。且前文也说当天是母亲节，格蕾丝想念她母亲院子里的丁香花才出去寻花。那么接下来可以再次交代丁香花和院子，照应前文，从而体现主人公格蕾丝的乐善博爱，突出故事主题。

第二步，围绕文章题目“Lilacs”和根据续写第一段所给出的段首句“When Grace was passing by the old woman's porch,she suddenly stopped the car.”进行提问构思：

（1）Where would she go after stopping the car?

（2）Who was on the porch?

（3）What would Grace do?

第三步，根据续写第二段所给出的段首句倒推续写第一段要写什么。

分析一下第二段所给出的段首句“When Grace got back to the car,she saw the woman in the wheelchair still waving to her,holding the lilacs tightly.”，我们可以推断续写第一段中格蕾丝把自己从山上摘的丁香花送给了老妇人。那么老妇人收到花时，老妇人的状态和反应，还有格蕾丝的动作及她所说的话，都应该是此段具体描写的重点。如此安排，确保两段之间衔接合理、情节连贯，体现了乐善博爱的正面价值观。

第四步，根据前文以及第二段段首句“When Grace got back to the car,she saw the woman in the wheelchair still waving to her,holding the lilacs tightly.”进行提问构思：

（1）When Grace saw this,how would she feel?

（2）What else would Grace do for the old woman?

（3）What might happen in the end?

三、润色成篇

在续写的过程中要注意“续”的原则，做到主题、情节、语言风格一致。具体如下：

（1）通过分析，我们发现本文的主题是弘扬积极正面的价值观，如乐善博爱，故续写时应注意结局的设计；

（2）续写的情节应和前面的开始和发展吻合，可根据人物的性格特点进行合理的预测；

（3）前文中有多处情感描写和动作描写，且用了大量的分词短语、介词短语和副词，续写时应注意并模仿这些语言风格；

（4）续写时应注意句型丰富、长短相间，同时要注意语法、用词、标点符号的准确性。