My Pen Pal

Mary is my pen pal. She is a 13-year-old girl from America. Mary is tall， slimand soft-spoken. She has long hair and a pair of beautiful eyes. Red is her favoritecolor. She is on淤a red blouse and a pink skirt. Being kind and helpful is her goodquality. Mary usually get于up at 6：40 a.m. At 7：15 a.m. she goes to school. She has ahappy family. Her father is a policeman and her mother is a盂actress. Mary hasdinner with her parents at 6：45 p.m. Well， do you know what her favorite food is？Ha ha， let me tell you. She likes Chinese dumplings best.

This is my pen pal. Do you like her？

河北省阜城縣第四中学马月月

优点：

本文作者从年龄、国籍、外貌、喜好和家庭等方面介绍了一位笔友。文章行文逻辑顺畅、条理分明，语法运用恰当，是一篇合格的学生范文。

需要修改的地方院

①on 改为in。表示“穿……衣服”用介词in。

②get 改为gets。主语是单数第三人称she，动词get 要加s。

③a 改为an。动词actress 首字母发音是元音，所以用不定冠词an。

评分院

按中考英语作文满分20 分的评分标准，本文修改前可得18 分。