I Had a Good Day

张超

Last Friday morning， I was on my way home from school. When I walked across the Jianzi Street， I saw an old woman stand① by the road. She looked worried. So I came up to her and asked what she was worrying about. “I want to across② the road， but the traffic is too busy for me.” Then I helped her walk across the road safe③. She thanked me very much. I said“Goodbye” to her and went home happily. I think④ I had a good day.

1. 優点：

本文描写了小作者放学回家途中帮助老人过马路的一事，体现了小作者助人为乐的精神。文章语言流畅，叙事清晰，结构严谨，层次分明，过渡自然。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①stand改为standing。see sb. doing sth.意为“看见某人正在做某事”。

②across改为cross。across和cross都有“穿过”之意，但前者是介词，而后者才是动词。

③safe改为safely。本句中动词是实意动词，故用副词修饰作状语。

④think改为thought。本文故事发生在上周五，故时态需用一般过去时。

3. 评分：

按中考英语作文满分20的评分标准，本文修改前可得18分。